the man

Once upon a time there was people who lived closed to the river the name of the river was timote the river was the dangerous river in the world. There was a man who was called timote the river was name after him he went surfing on the river the river had crocodile he was surfing then suddenly a tail nibbed my leg.Then i had a knife with me i was waiting for the crocodile come out i saw it again i grabbed my knife and chopped his head off then we took off the skin then we made boots with it.

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